A listener gets one pass at your words, at your speed, in your order — so a paragraph written to be graded is genuinely mistuned for the ear. Take one of these competent, unspeakable drafts and apply the conversion moves one at a time. Watch the sentence meter, the breath bars and the diagnosis change as you go.
1 · Pick a draft that was written to be read
2 · Apply the moves — toggle any one on or off
Simplifying syntax is not simplifying ideas. Every converted version below carries the same claim with the same evidence. It just distributes the load across more sentences and attaches it to things a listener can name.
Built for the eyeNothing converted yet — this is a paper being read aloud.
Click any dotted phrase to convert it, or any solid phrase to put it back.